This blogpost discusses my Peer Review comment for Ellie George's Open Letter for Project 4 of English 109H.
Author: Ellie George
Title & Link to Rough Cut: Draft of Open Letter
I really appreciate how Ellie decided to steer from our suggested project genres and write an Open Letter. I feel like this format is one of the best ways to voice a self-reflection and I can tell from her draft that she's on a good track. She hits all major topics such as the type of writer she was before, how she handled things during the semester, and a reflection of how she came out in the end. I decided to make a content suggest for her and that suggestion was to make her letter flow more, and be a little casual as if she was writing to a friend. The rough cut sounded a little "blocky" and the word choice was fairly bland. I suggested that she work on the transitions between paragraphs and topics and try to expand on her word choice to make it a little more exciting for the reader. She definitely had a good backbone to her project, now she just needs to add all the meat!
Friday, May 6, 2016
Editorial Report 15b
This blog serves as a compare/contrast analysis of the Rough Cut of my Video Essay to the Final Cut.
Rought Cut: Rough Draft
Final Cut: Final Draft
(Any part of the video after 12 seconds, and before 7:35)
Rought Cut: Rough Draft
Final Cut: Final Draft
(Any part of the video after 12 seconds, and before 7:35)
- How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
As stated in the previous blog, in this edited version I did not really change anything content-wise. I did add subtitles to my different projects when I was presenting them. That just helps in clarifying what it was, in case it was not already obvious when I had said it. I also added credits in the end which I almost forgot to do in my first one. This is necessary so I can credit where I got my sounds from.
- How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
For this editorial report I'd like to focus on the music that I decided to incorporate in my Video Essay. I added 3 different instrumentals at a low volume to give some background noise in hopes that it would keep the viewer more engaged. The first one starts when it's solely the video of me talking, then when the projects start (3:35) the music changes to something else, and I have this happen again at around 5:30. I made sure to fade in and out of each song so that the transitions would be less abrupt. I think switching the music up will help keep my audience focused rather than having just one song playing throughout. I decided to go with very chill, laid back songs because I am very soft spoken and I feel like really happy or serious music would take away from it. I had to go in and amplify my voice just for the fact that I was speaking kind of low and away from the mic, and so it would sound better above the music. I think these small additions made the biggest changes for my final version.
Editorial Report 15a
This blog serves as a compare/contrast analysis of the Rough Cut of my Video Essay to the Final Cut.
Rought Cut: Rough Draft
Final Cut: Final Draft
(First 12 seconds of both, and last 7 seconds of final)
Rought Cut: Rough Draft
Final Cut: Final Draft
(First 12 seconds of both, and last 7 seconds of final)
- How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
In this edited version I did not really change anything content-wise. I did add subtitles to my different projects when I was presenting them. That just helps in clarifying what it was, in case it was not already obvious when I had said it. I also added credits in the end which I almost forgot to do in my first one. This is necessary so I can credit where I got my sounds from.
- How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
I'd like to focus on the first 12 seconds of both videos. I changed the intro theme song to something that was not so serious because I felt that it didn't fit in the video. The new sound I chose is very light and happy and has a melodic piano tune. I also changed the background to have a new teal-to-blue gradient which was easier on the eyes and looks way better than a straight blue background. I think these little changes made the biggest differences in introducing and ending my video essay.
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
This blogpost serves as a Rough Cut for my Video Essay for the Final Project of English 109H.
Link to Rough Cut: English Course Final Video Essay Rough Cut
Link to Rough Cut: English Course Final Video Essay Rough Cut
- Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know
I wanted to keep this video really laid back as if it were just a vlog of my self reflection as a writer. With that being said, it is a pretty casual video, except I am reading from a script. I knew it would be hard to remember all my information and make sure I hit all my targeted subjects so I had no choice but to read from a script.
- Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)
I think my biggest issue for my Rough Cut is that I am missing music to help keep my audience engaged. I talk a lot...but I really did change a lot as a writer so I wanted to be specific in how I changed. It is kind of a dull subject because not only am I talk about myself, but I am talking about myself as a writer...so spicing it up a little would help.
- Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)
I think a major strength of my Rough cut is the content itself. I really took time to self reflect on myself as a writer, and that resulted in me having a lot to say. I also incorporate screenshots/videos of my different projects throughout the video.
Sunday, May 1, 2016
Peer Review 14
This blogpost serves as a peer review for Mike Duffek's Video Essay for Project 4.
Author: Mike Duffek
Title & Link to Post: P4- Content Outline
For this peer review, I decided to make a brainstorming suggestion for Mike's Video Essay. Mike had a great outline for his video essay, it was easy to follow and very descriptive. He knows exactly what he wants to include in each of the sections of his video and I think his plan is amazing. I am really interested to see how much he has changed as writer just for the fact that he hasn't been in an english class like this in over 10 years. One suggestion that I would like to make is that he should include examples of his work in this course to help expand on the good and/or rough parts of each project that he found. He seems to have a lot of different feelings for each projects, so examples of these would be cool. I think he is on a great track for a great video essay.
Author: Mike Duffek
Title & Link to Post: P4- Content Outline
For this peer review, I decided to make a brainstorming suggestion for Mike's Video Essay. Mike had a great outline for his video essay, it was easy to follow and very descriptive. He knows exactly what he wants to include in each of the sections of his video and I think his plan is amazing. I am really interested to see how much he has changed as writer just for the fact that he hasn't been in an english class like this in over 10 years. One suggestion that I would like to make is that he should include examples of his work in this course to help expand on the good and/or rough parts of each project that he found. He seems to have a lot of different feelings for each projects, so examples of these would be cool. I think he is on a great track for a great video essay.
Production Report 14b
This blog serves as a production report for my final video essay for English 109H.
- How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?
The form for how I presented my raw content is much different than what it is going to be in my final project. I have provided a script of what I plan on saying in my Video Essay. The way it will be presented in my Video Essay me saying it while being filmed.
- How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
So far the production of this raw material has been going okay. I do feel a little rush with the project, especially trying to juggle it with some other projects. I feel like I might be missing some points but I am doing my best to piece it all together.
Outline Item- First Section:
The first section will mainly be a discussion of the type of writer I was before this semester. I will cover what, at the time, I believed were my strengths and weaknesses when it came to writing and English in general. I will also discuss what I perceived this English class was going to be, and maybe some of my fears coming into it, and my expectations.
Adaptation of Outline Item:
Before I started this course, I thought that I was a fairly good writer just for the fact that I have been forced to write all my life. I knew that I had some things to work on here and there, but I genuinely thought I would be set for this course. The english and history courses that i took in high school were held to a very high standard, and my experience with how writing in college went from first semester, made me think that I would be all set for and actual english course for this past semester. I knew I had a problem with time management, I have always had that problem with basically all aspects of my life. One thing I knew for sure is that I always get things done, even if I steer away from a planned schedule, it all comes together in the end. I knew this would give me some challenges along the way, but I did not think it would have such an impact on my coursework for this class. I was always someone who would kind of just let things go with the flow. I never really structured a plan before I started writing, I just let my thoughts flow and then I would do some editing after words. I think this was due to my hatred of revisions and peer review. It would always frustrate me when I would receive feedback and would have to rewrite my entire body of work. My “solution” for this was to just spend a lot of time during my drafts and write it as if it was a final, in hopes of making my revision process less tedious. For the most part it worked, except when I started this class.
Production Report 14a
This blog serves as a production report for my final video essay for English 109H.
Outline Item- Opening Section:
For the opening section I'd like to cover how, in general, I have changed as a writer over the course of this semester. I will touch on the topics that will be discussed in my body paragraphs such as changes in my strengths and weaknesses, as well as all the things I have learned this year. I will try and add in a personal story in an attempt to try and make it interesting for my audience.
Adaptation of Outline Item:
English has never been my strength when it comes to different subjects in school, so coming into English 109H my second semester of freshman year in college, I really didn’t know what to expect. I heard stories from my older sister that it was going to be a pretty challenging course with a lot of writing. Needless to say, I was a little nervous coming into this class, but it turned out to be very different than what I thought. The way this course was structured was much different than I had anticipated and throughout the semester I truly did not think that I had changed as a writer. After actually looking back on my course work and how I go about starting, actually doing, and finishing my different projects for English, I realized that I actually have changed a lot as a writer. This video serves as a self-assessment of how I personally have transformed as a writer from the beginning to the end of the semester.
- How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?
The form for how I presented my raw content is much different than what it is going to be in my final project. I have provided a script of what I plan on saying in my Video Essay. The way it will be presented in my Video Essay me saying it while being filmed.
- How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
So far the production of this raw material has been going okay. I do feel a little rush with the project, especially trying to juggle it with some other projects. I feel like I might be missing some points but I am doing my best to piece it all together.
Outline Item- Opening Section:
For the opening section I'd like to cover how, in general, I have changed as a writer over the course of this semester. I will touch on the topics that will be discussed in my body paragraphs such as changes in my strengths and weaknesses, as well as all the things I have learned this year. I will try and add in a personal story in an attempt to try and make it interesting for my audience.
Adaptation of Outline Item:
English has never been my strength when it comes to different subjects in school, so coming into English 109H my second semester of freshman year in college, I really didn’t know what to expect. I heard stories from my older sister that it was going to be a pretty challenging course with a lot of writing. Needless to say, I was a little nervous coming into this class, but it turned out to be very different than what I thought. The way this course was structured was much different than I had anticipated and throughout the semester I truly did not think that I had changed as a writer. After actually looking back on my course work and how I go about starting, actually doing, and finishing my different projects for English, I realized that I actually have changed a lot as a writer. This video serves as a self-assessment of how I personally have transformed as a writer from the beginning to the end of the semester.
Production Schedule
This blogpost serves as a Production Schedule for the final project for English 109H.
April 24th-May 1st
What to do: Blogposts and process work to prepare for the final project
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 2nd
Changes: Blogs (as usual) were completed on Sunday
May 2nd
What to do: Finish blogposts if necessary and start forming a script for the final project
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 2nd
Changes:
May 3rd
What to do: Finish up script for the project and start recording- even if it is rough - create something that can recieve feedback to improve
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 3rd/4th
Changes:
May 4th
What to do: Complete rough draft and get it peer edited ASAP
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop, peers to review
Date Completed: May 4th
Changes:
May 5th
What to do: Make adjustments based on peer review and START FINAL CUT.
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Data Completed: May 5th/6th
Changes:
May 6th
What to do: Finish up final cut and submit to Dropbox via Youtube link
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 6th
Changes:
April 24th-May 1st
What to do: Blogposts and process work to prepare for the final project
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 2nd
Changes: Blogs (as usual) were completed on Sunday
May 2nd
What to do: Finish blogposts if necessary and start forming a script for the final project
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 2nd
Changes:
May 3rd
What to do: Finish up script for the project and start recording- even if it is rough - create something that can recieve feedback to improve
Location: Library/ Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 3rd/4th
Changes:
May 4th
What to do: Complete rough draft and get it peer edited ASAP
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop, peers to review
Date Completed: May 4th
Changes:
May 5th
What to do: Make adjustments based on peer review and START FINAL CUT.
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Data Completed: May 5th/6th
Changes:
May 6th
What to do: Finish up final cut and submit to Dropbox via Youtube link
Location: Library/Home
Resources Required: Laptop
Date Completed: May 6th
Changes:
Content Outline
For this blogpost, I am providing my proposed Content Outline for my final project, the self-reflection.
Format: Video Essay
Opening Section:
For the opening section I'd like to cover how, in general, I have changed as a writer over the course of this semester. I will touch on the topics that will be discussed in my body paragraphs such as changes in my strengths and weaknesses, as well as all the things I have learned this year. I will try and add in a personal story in an attempt to try and make it interesting for my audience.
First Section:
The first section will mainly be a discussion of the type of writer I was before this semester. I will cover what, at the time, I believed were my strengths and weaknesses when it came to writing and English in general. I will also discuss what I perceived this English class was going to be, and maybe some of my fears coming into it, and my expectations.
Second Section:
The second section will discuss the different types of projects I did, and the process work that was included for them. I will talk about how I adjusted to each project and how my previous experience with writing may or may not have helped with creating the project. Once, again, I'll talk about eh strengths and weaknesses of each of those projects. If possible, I'll incorporate snippets of each of my project inside the video.
Third Section:
This third section will be an overall look on how I have changed as a writer. I'll give some examples of how I've changed when it comes to different writing situations. I will also talk about how I can use the skills I've learned and apply them to my professional and academic life. Now that I have learned that different genres are used for different types of audiences, I can talk about analyzing the rhetorical situation of each of my future projects This section will most likely be the longest because it will be the main chunk of the reflection part and self assessment.
Closing Section:
The closing section of my project will sum up the entire project. It will touch base on how I have transformed as a writer and provide the specifics such as how I've handled time management, how my writing has improved, how I decide to plan things in advance. It will include more than this as well, just recapping on how I have changed. I will also include how I will take these skills and incorporate them to use in the future.
Format: Video Essay
Opening Section:
For the opening section I'd like to cover how, in general, I have changed as a writer over the course of this semester. I will touch on the topics that will be discussed in my body paragraphs such as changes in my strengths and weaknesses, as well as all the things I have learned this year. I will try and add in a personal story in an attempt to try and make it interesting for my audience.
First Section:
The first section will mainly be a discussion of the type of writer I was before this semester. I will cover what, at the time, I believed were my strengths and weaknesses when it came to writing and English in general. I will also discuss what I perceived this English class was going to be, and maybe some of my fears coming into it, and my expectations.
Second Section:
The second section will discuss the different types of projects I did, and the process work that was included for them. I will talk about how I adjusted to each project and how my previous experience with writing may or may not have helped with creating the project. Once, again, I'll talk about eh strengths and weaknesses of each of those projects. If possible, I'll incorporate snippets of each of my project inside the video.
Third Section:
This third section will be an overall look on how I have changed as a writer. I'll give some examples of how I've changed when it comes to different writing situations. I will also talk about how I can use the skills I've learned and apply them to my professional and academic life. Now that I have learned that different genres are used for different types of audiences, I can talk about analyzing the rhetorical situation of each of my future projects This section will most likely be the longest because it will be the main chunk of the reflection part and self assessment.
Closing Section:
The closing section of my project will sum up the entire project. It will touch base on how I have transformed as a writer and provide the specifics such as how I've handled time management, how my writing has improved, how I decide to plan things in advance. It will include more than this as well, just recapping on how I have changed. I will also include how I will take these skills and incorporate them to use in the future.
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